Based off of Iagoo, the Story-Teller and Shin-ge-bis Fools the North Wind
My personal picture of my Pa: Over 80 years old and still building cars!
There was once an amazing grandfather who was simply called Pa. He was loving to all of his grandchildren and would tell them stories in order to teach them life lessons. He would also tell these stories to help his grandchildren face their fears of the world, and to know that courage and intelligence can get you anywhere.
One day, one of his granddaughters asked him to tell her about tornadoes. As a young girl growing up in Oklahoma, she was very afraid of tornadoes. So, Pa told her about the invention of storm shelters. He told her that long ago, man and nature had a quarrel.....
Man was the new ruler of the world, afraid of nothing. This was something that the wind did not take lightly. The wind used to be feared by all, but man make a mockery of the wind. Man would show no fear when wind blew fiercely across the land, even when animals would tremble in fear. The wind decided to gather as much strength as possible, and soon a tornado was up and roaring. It headed straight for the man, chasing him for many miles. Soon, they reached a large hole in the ground. The wind found this as a perfect chance to trap the man. However, when the man jumped in the hole, the tornado couldn't reach him. Therefore, something that the wind thought would be the downfall of man, actually ended up saving him.
Author's Note: I decided to write this story because Iagoo reminded me of my Pa immediately. He is someone who is always teaching me something and telling me stories, both silly and serious. I wanted to keep the wind and man as the main characters, but I also decided to put my own personal twist into the story as well. Growing up in Moore, OK has been a challenge, but it has also made me stronger as a person as well. I hope that this story was relatable and still was close to the original as well.
Hi Megan! It's really cool how you connected a character that you read about to own Pa and incorporated that element into the story. I wish you'd brought the narrative back to the larger story of one of Pa's granddaughters asking him about her fears. I feel like this would've made the story feel a little more complete. I had a great time reading this, awesome job!
ReplyDeleteHi Megan,
ReplyDeleteIt’s so great that you put our own personal twist on this, and your Pa sounds like an awesome man and grandfather! (And what a picture of him with that car frame.) Using a story on tornadoes is also so appropriate for the Oklahoma setting and your Moore background.
(I remember when I first came to OU — I’m from out of state — and we asked a local about the area. He replied: “OKC? — Good! Norman? — Good! Moore? — Nah, Moore’s bad.” We asked why, and he told us about how all the tornadoes somehow hit Moore and avoid the other two. That little exchange has stuck with me — lot of admiration for the people in Moore who just keep building it right back up after it gets knocked down!)
Best,
Alby
Hi Megan, your story is such a sweet dedication to your grandfather. He seems like a remarkable man based on your tribute! Tornadoes are truly some of the scariest things on the planet. I have nightmares about them pretty frequently! It's always interesting to hear myths about weather phenomena, particularly personifications of them. Good thing Man found that hole!
ReplyDelete- Cate
Hi Megan!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you incorporated yourself and your grandfather into the story. I liked how you framed the story of man and the wind within a story about Pa and his granddaughters who are afraid of tornadoes. I kind of wish I knew more about the context of how the man and wind's battle was presented in the original story from your author's note though. Overall, I thought this was a really interesting story
Hi Megan,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story. The flow and the idea were really interesting to read. I was a little confused by your author's note, I think it would help if you explained the original story as well as how you changed it. It was really a great story and I can't wait to read more of your work.
Hi Megan,
ReplyDeleteI really like how personal you made this story. It was so authentic and real. Iagoo also reminds me of my grandfathers. My grandfathers always encouraged me and never failed to put a smile on my face. Additionally, I like how you explained how tornadoes were created. You did a great job of keeping the wind and man in the story.
Hey Megan,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you brought your grandpa (Pa) into the story by having him be this wise old man who constantly tells stories in order to educate and entertain. I especially liked the fact that the story you told was relating to Oklahoma, especially in a similar way that the Native American stories were told, with Man ruling the world. Overall, great story.
Andrew
Hi Megan!
ReplyDeleteWow, it's so cool that you were able to incorporate your grandfather (who sounds like a wonderful man!) into your story, along with the lesson about tornadoes that is so uniquely Oklahoman. Even though this was really short, I thoroughly enjoyed it. My only critique would be to give a brief recounting of the source story in the author's note, so that reader's can get a sense for what it was.